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# 1 14-01-2004 , 04:03 AM

Simply Maya OG
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Here is something I wrote. I think its good, but needs work. Its supposed to be song lyrics, and Im working on guitar riffs and all for it now. Lemme know what you guys think. user added image

Comments are much appriciated.

Open Up

Verse 1:
You know who you are
Stop denying yourself
You’re better than that
Be the man you are
Death isn’t the answer
Emerge from the shadows of your dreary life
You need to see. You need to be your true self.

Chorus:
Come out of the shadows
Let people know, how you really feel
Cause your driving the wrong way
Stop. Turn around. Look at your life
And turn it upside down

Verse 2:
Take that beat inside your head
And turn that thing right up
Your better than that
Be who you are, and live out your life
You need to see. You need to be your true self.

Outro:
If you saw, how we are
You’d turn yourself right around
You’ve got friends, you’ve got us
And know, where not going away

- Hybrid

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# 2 14-01-2004 , 04:36 AM

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Wow right on my man, Very up lifting lyric’s, Most of the stuff I write is about love and all that crap, but you got a tight piece of writing laid down. user added image

good work

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# 3 15-01-2004 , 03:53 AM

Simply Maya OG
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Yea, thats about my friend, who dosent think too high of himself. He thinks he's bad at everything, and has no faith in himself what-so-ever. Here's another one. user added image

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Verse:
Every good thing brings a bad thing
Just when you thought you had something
It’s taken away from you
Quicker than you can blink
Try as hard as you can

Chorus:
It won’t matter
Nothing exists anymore
In the end
Nothing matters

Verse:
Control who you want
Say what you want
Do what you want
Nothing matters
Take my life away
As if it were never there

Outro:
I trusted you to do what you said
So take everything away from me
You selfish bitches
I don’t want it anymore

- Hybrid

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# 4 16-01-2004 , 04:57 AM

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Heres a song I wrote after my divorce, If the link works : ) a few friends have a little band and we kick out a few tunes here and there, Mind that I’m not a professional arties I just pick and sing the best I can. user added image

Jedi

Last edited by R-Tillery; 16-01-2004 at 06:00 AM.

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# 5 16-01-2004 , 06:01 AM

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Think I fixed it?

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# 6 18-01-2004 , 08:07 PM

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Jedi/Gipsy

Never said I was a webpage wizz user added image

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# 7 18-01-2004 , 09:18 PM

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the link to jedi still doesnt works to me

gipsy sounds good man user added image

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# 8 18-01-2004 , 10:32 PM

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Hey thanx,,

I think I fixed it,, but then ??? user added image

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# 9 19-01-2004 , 03:39 AM

Simply Maya OG
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Jedi....I like it. One thing that I dont like is the short amount of time between the chorus and the interlude (about 2:25 in the song). I think it should be alittle longer between the two. But other than that, I like it.

Gipsy...It wouldt let me DL it. So Ill check it alittle later, and check it out. user added image

- Hybrid

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# 10 19-01-2004 , 04:34 AM

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Yea My DSL company is cheap as hell and use's third rate server for Their custmors,, it should be up in a little while.

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# 11 19-01-2004 , 05:04 AM

Simply Maya OG
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Heres another one. For those who dont know, I moved upto upstate NY (USA) about a year and 1/2 ago, and I hate it up here. One day, sitting in school, I was just really mad at everything and everyone around me. So that was my fuel for this one. Still thinking of a name for it. Gladly accepting suggestions. user added image

Intro/Bridge:
I’m tired of wasting my time
(I’m tired of) wasting my life

Verse 1:
This place makes me sick
Snobby, preppy b*tches
They wouldn’t know responsibility if it hit them in the head
Driving around daddy’s car
Well f*ck your car, f*ck your family
F*ck your lives, f*ck this place

Chorus:
I’m so sick of these lies
(I’m so) sick of this place
(I’m so) sick of these people
(So) F*ck you and yourself
(F*ck) you and your friends
It’s a virus waiting to be spread

Verse 2:
I left a good life for this
I must be crazy
Having a lot, now nothing
No one knows what its like
I’m living in hell
But no one else knows
No one else cares
Except for one

Outro:
Just take your shit
And leave me alone

- Hybrid

Last edited by I-Iybrid; 19-01-2004 at 02:40 PM.

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# 12 19-01-2004 , 05:42 AM

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how a bout ( Solitude ) user added image

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# 13 20-01-2004 , 02:51 AM

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Glad you liked the songs,, but got's ta take em off the server,, needs the space. user added image

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# 14 20-01-2004 , 02:53 AM

Simply Maya OG
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Its kool Tiller. I already DL'ed them. user added image

Solitude....hm...Ill have to think about that one....

- Hybrid

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# 15 29-01-2004 , 04:13 AM

Simply Maya OG
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Anyone else have any writings they'd like to share? Im interested in seeing what you guys/girls have written. Im working on something, that I really like. So once I get that done, Ill put it up. Its called "Give It All Away". user added image

- Hybrid

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